Hello guys this is my first time of writing a story in this section and pls bear with me for my misdeeds and unregular updates am still inexperienced. All thanks to sir Legover of the Osun state polythecnic Iree slt Nd2.I would like to hail all my inspiration here.
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Episode 1(dedicated to the late psalmwise may he R.I.P)
The lust sex
Episode 1
Siam secondary sku was one of d three private sku in my mum city where we refers to as d citadel of knowldge I was 16 wen I was an ss2 student I apen to be d hope of whole sku as d new senior prefect boi but to everyone surprise it was on a monday morning on d assembly where we lined up according to our grade d final year student are no where to be found here comes d sku principal
Principal ;hello students
Students ;all chorus hello sir
Principal ;as we all know dat we av to select new prefect among our SS2 students ,today is d day we shall do dat
Students;all momour hunm....
As d names was called by d principal and dre post was announced dey were given tags writen on it is d title of dre post in sku lastly it remains two of us it was me and my close friend AQUILA TAIWO cool cat gentle looking and handsome my height is at his shoulder level he is hairy light skin his eye brow will seduce any young lady in d citadel of knowledge but on ground we still av many post but what really came to d mind of d student is dat of senior prefect boi and d assistant den d principal break d silence by calling on my surname
Principal ;Aadebayo !!!!! D whole sku chorus.
Students; SP SP SP !!!
Well I expect dis day to come so I don't so much feel api
Principal(turns me arround to d mass ) u will be our punctuality prefect
Students ;ahahah!!!!!!!!
I feel embarrassed and disgraced and next he called on my friend as d senior prefect boi till d end of d assembly I am not myself d whole sku looked at me I feel in me lik dey make jest of me
But I could catch d sight of a lady looking at me with pity full her eyes
BASSY was an ss1 student she is d most beautiful of d sku every corper teacher wants her even our principal wants her b all means but being private sku such act is not allowed she is light in complexion she a bit taller than me she has a round faced with glittering eye a pointing nose lik an half casta round pink lips her eye lashes calls on any man attention a straight figure eight lady her burst give attractive luks from her dressher hips is indeed lik beyounce's own I can't stop wondering while d sku most beatiful lady is luking at a looser like me , after d words of d principal we all walked down to our diffrent classes.......... Tbc

Episode 2

It was break time at about 11;30 I was sitting under d cashew tree trying to avoid any discussion with any of my class mate
At my right arm shoulder I can feel a hand
Bassey; gud afternoon senior
Me; afternoon to u(I was wondering if am dreaming)
Bassey ; can I sit beside u?
(I nod my head in positive answer)
Why are u sitting lonely here ?
U are not playing football today?
Me; yes (pretending to be ok)
She looked straight into my eye
And I feel strange
She do not say a word
D silence continue untill when one of her class mate came to her threaten to put garri on her head
And she get hold of me as her shelter
I take my anger look on d lady and she left
Expecting her to stay back to her normal position
But she remain adamant
Putting her head on my shoulder
Den we watch two lizard fighting
It seems interesting to her
But what really interest me
Was her head
On my shoulder I can't bliv it
Bassey; will u lik to eat anything?
NO I say
Bassey ;ok I will get u snacks
I make no response
Few minute later she is back
With a pack of shapes biscuit and a chocolate viju milk
Which if I coul recollect maybe during new year festive I took
I can't reject it
Me;tanks a lot I really appreciate it
She sat beside me want to watch me eatin but am not
Down in my mind I av d thought dat heavens smile on me today

I want to put my hand on her
Tight but I couldn't summon d courage
As I ate d biscuit she told her moon night story which I did enjoy

I look into her eye and she look into mine
Dis time arround am not feeling shy nor blush
She hold my hand and rub it wit hers
She carres my hands dat I always lost myself
Suddenly she draw her lips close to mine
I can't wait to av d pink juice sucked
But it pass by me lik she is going to peck me
All I hear was
Am going to class
And I watch her hip bouncing left and right as she walked
Into her class ....tbc

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You should read before you post, too many grammatical errors, I don't care if it's your first time

Your story is confusing. I almost believed you wrote some parts in German.

The only long episode I can is the one that can assure increased Acc bal

hamzatseyi, try not to abbreviate your words. Also, remember to separate paragraphs with some space.

llaykorn:
hamzatseyi, try not to abbreviate your words. Also, remember to separate paragraphs with some space.

thanks boss would look into it

Bring it oN bro bring it on...Nice story though

The lust sex

Episode 3

Bassey on my bed putting her head on my laps
,
We make gist
And talk about career.
My eyes gaze at d valley of her breast indeed fresh and bursting my brain.
With her skirt slightly up I can c d beauty of her laps,
I can't wait to put my hands on dem and cares her down to her legs.
Her skin moisture lik babe part
While I was wondering
on her beauty.
She had stop talking but
I didn't notice,
she hold me at d neck,
draw my head to her,
give me a peck
,and I was so excited
,that I smile
to her then she rise up,
and tell me am going home,
as she turns her back
i can c d robust shape of d hips
calling on my attention
i summon some courage
and put my arm around her waist
and put my head on her shoulder then
she turns around
and put her arm around me
Kissed me passionately.

B4 I open my eye I found my self on d bed
My shirt was off
Den she loose hers as well
Knee down across me her buttock on me
Luking at her within few second
We were both naked
I was standing erect vertically while
My dick was standing erect horizontally
We kissed for about 3 minute
Before I can say a word
I saw her raising her left laps
Hanging on my right hand
My left hand
Across her waist
While I was feeding
On man early fud
(Her burst) it was buy one
Get one free promo
After I suck d first breast
She offer d second
Next I saw my dick wit her lik jackson holding microphone
Put it into a part of her dat
Seems lik hole but fleshy
I keep forcing it in
Until it seems lik I reach d end
Hush!!!
Hunm!!!
She scream and draw back her hips
Lik dancing kerewa
Den with my dick I goes in and out
Continuously
While we both scream
Babe I lov dis
Com'on give it to me
Ooohhh
Oohsh
Aush
Hunm!!!
Den suddenly a strange voice come around
Harder!!!!!
Harder
Babe give it to me harder
Fur!!!!furck me babe
Ooooooooohhhohohoh
D bed is wet again
Is 7;42am
I av to go to class
My brother wake me up from sleep
I av to stop dreaming
I stand up and hold my penis in d boxer pant
Av already wet d bed
Is wet dream
4k me ...................tbc

Episode 4
The day was our interschool quiz competition,and I was among the representative of my school,lucky enough for me Bassey was among the few spectators that went with my school,at the quiz center.........mm
D world most finest city is dash,the quiz master throw d last question to the top school at first position, but none of them was able to answer it.
It was the yearly student association
Quiz competition,it is always the season of the other two private schools to counter themself,
While my school lagged behind finding their position around fourth and fifth.
I sat at d middle it was Adeoyin Adeniyi at my right hand and Akpan Bassy at my left,we haved done great job together expecting our position around third,but we were been toped by the other two private schools at d same mark leading us by 2Points.
The question without option was thrown to us as bonus, it seems strange to all student and guest in d hall,but i listen silently trying to chose maybe america or asia as my answer.
Suddenly I heard an argumentative whispering voice far among d guest DON SIMON,
So I stand up courageously and waste no time to pronounce it the quiz master reply see me after the vote of thanks,the next thing I heard is u are correct, it was amazing although the question was strange but it also took us to the first position of the competition,which my school have not attain for d past 4 years.

As we came to the end of d quiz adding 3 marks to ours bringing us to d top.
The whole town was all about me Bassey looked into my eye strangely,and she is expecting me to say something,while i made a sign of innocent man. I received a hug from my class mate Adeoyin,and we were both full of joy.

As d award was been announced,i was called with my school principal,to come and snap with the award,which I did.
We were given so many gift which we can't carry on our own back to school.

Bassey was no where to be found as well a the biology student teacher.
No one notice but me cos she never leaves my side
I go straight into my class on my seat feeling important,even though the whole school want to hear d story of d quiz competition,I don't want to talk to anyone,having it down in me dat I have proved to dem dat am worthy of been d school SP.

I open my locker,to check on my last 50naira change to use for jungle gambling after the school hour amazingly,i saw a letter with capital words at d back saying from ur darling.....tbc

This is really the worst write up ever.....

The lust sex

Episode 5

No 1,love arena.
Opp affections,
Feelings bus stop
Day of hapiness.
Darling

With great pleasure $ hapiness, I wrote this letter to u ,hope u are doing well? If so glory be to d creator.
The motive of this letter to u is to express my feelings towards u. Its been hard time for me to sleep all day long, ur thought fill my heart, a single sight of u makes me happy than a million naira, to be candid I will like u to be my lover,I want u and not any other person,I can't disclose my identity now, cos I don't want ur classmates to know about this.
Pls endeavor to grant my wish, I really love u with all my heart
Ur's lovely
Lover angel



I read over and over again,as many thought runs my mind
,do u think dis is meant for u ?
do u think bassy did dis ?
but how will I know this person
? to be sincere I really
felt on top of d world
,it was amazing dat I can't stop to wonder what I have read,I start day dreaming all about bassy
,i knew she love me
,but did she have that courage
to woo a guy herself ?

While I was wit my thoughts,i heard a voice from my back
Senior!!!! I turn around and saw a young jss3 lady,she moved closer to about two inches to my ear and whispered
senior bassy summon u.

I feel like here comes my dream,that I will one day hold her in my arms
and kiss her,
as I was about to step out of d class,
i heard a disgusting tone saying
,silly boy go back to ur seat.

It was uncle smart d geography teacher
,all what he said dat day fell at d backyard of my ears,in d next one hour,he left and by then it was break time already.
So I head to d cashew tree shed where I intend to see bassy
,but instead many students gather around me,they want to know about d outcome of d quiz competition, because am d hero of d day.
Many buy me gifts and food
s,But my mind wasn't with them
,i want to see d citadel
angel and have her tell me she wrote d letter to me.
But I can't just resist d force of d round leather calling on my attention for kick,
So I try to excuse myself from dem and leave for d pitch.

Den a lady get hold of me.It was TOYIN d afro girl,
Senior gud afternoon,Me;afternoon to u
,her sight caught my attention,cos she is d most pretty, black complexioned lady,have ever seen.

She raised her oval face with well treamed eye hairs on me.Her face set lik evening sun
,very beautiful,that d white part of her eye proclaim d beauty in black,that makes her exceptional to d light ones.


I gave her a suspicious look, as she turns back shaking her buttock to my attention which I can't resist looking at it.

All of sudden I heard my name from d vacant cashew tree
,saying com wit me,i told myself:
She wants to tell me about her letter,
which I can't wait to give a positive answer
to.
She open her arms welcoming me to give her a hug
,which I did and she peck my neck.
U did amazed me today wit d last bonus question,
I said nothing but felt proud of myself.

Did u c what I kept in ur locker for u ?
I said yes
have u ....
I cut her and said yes
Alright is my pleasure, she nodded
her head.
She stand up to go and said
pls keep my cooler for me after eating it,I will send someone to take it
What!!!!! ...........

Cooler?
As she depart I rush to my locker and saw a cooler full of rice and beans .........tbc..

The lust sex Episode 6
Roll d stone brother Abass; dis game will be call board Tope ; u can't escape this It will be yohteh Me ;this is my one and only #50 naira So I think heaven smile on me Dis must be yohteh Taiwo; anybody outside betting He can't av d game to be yohteh Tope put #200 note More!!!! But something in me tells me am ging to win dis Dis is two diffrent situation In dice gambling We are seven playing 100 naira each all makin d sum of 700 but d highest point On ground is two of dem wit 9s if my figure goes beyound 9 I will av d whole money (Yohteh)instead of sharing Within first and second 400 300 If is below We will all replay d game I hold d dice aand trow my turn d first appearance turns to be 4 While d other keep rolling I almost loose hope But am very glad to see figure 6 adding to 4 making ten It wasn't funny at all I play many rounds and it was my Lucky day After a while I notice is after 5 I av to go home I emerged from d uncompleted building where we play our games Before I could step out of d jungle I saw toyin sitting Under D flamboyant shed Hello senior Hi What are u doing here Am waiting for someone And av u seen Her nooo not her but him It hurt me someao dat dis Lady must of been dating one of my gambling mate Ok av u seen him Yess Den u can go home Sure Which side are u heading She ask seducing me with her eye I said down left So she took my bag With her and we match together Toyin: senior what av u been doing down dre dat u were all shouting Are u smoking also? Cos does guys in dre are all bad boys Hunm I sigh Me: but u can answer dat Sh paused I don't mean to embarrassed u but,,,, I stop her And tell her am not mad at her She smile at me At d side of my bag D zip was not tightly closed dat part of d letter shows out And fell down She picked it up innocently Senior is dis for u I glance at her maybe she av seen it or not But she av not open it D capital letter Writing at d back what's not amazing her She look at it suspiciously Me;its not for me As I narrate d story Toyin; is for u I looked at her trying to explain Can't u hear me right? Toyin;I heard u but d letter Is for u And is from someone u knew It seems confusing here Did bassey send her to me She may cos dey are friend I asked her with trick But she refused Den ao did u know Toyin; u knew av been in dis sku since last term U av always been my thought and taught She can't say much cos she av already catch my attention We were still in d sku premises at d back of d junior class She put are back vertically at d wall as she draw me close to her She robb me from for head to neck with her right hand I hold her jaw with my Two hands As I give her a deep kiss She penetrate her hand into My trouser as she get hold Of my d*ck She off my waist coat I did d same for her She loose my zip and bring out D trouble maker I put my tallest left finger in her private part To be kind Toyin is only puttin on a G string Amazing I finger her as she squeeze my dick I did dis passionately dat I Forget we were in sku premises although lonely She is wet already She knelt down b4 me she get Hold of my dick She draw her head closer dat I can't wait to av it sucked She robb it to d coaster sac I hold my her head with my hands As she withdrew and put My dick back to D position We set to go home ..............tbc.

DJEhimond:
Your story is confusing. I almost believed you wrote some parts in German.

lmao ah an guy..... chilex nah

OlufemiWhit:
This is really the worst write up ever.....

lol be a little less blunt with your critics,it aint easy to write

the story line is un-understandable #ibadan.

First of all, I got here cos I got a mention to check out the story going on here. And here I am with my own piece of criticism.
I believe this is your first ever story, but even at that, you made it seem as if this is the first time you are writing. (No offence)
I have the following questions for you.
Do you read your write ups after typing? Have you ever written anything in English? Love letters, essays, articles or even exams? If yes, then your story says otherwise.
As much as I would have loved not to be hard on you, there is no way I can criticize without going hard.
Now to the main issue;
1. What will be the moral of your story if a SS2 student is having sexual relationship with a SS1 student? There is a place you said everyone wanted Bassy or what's her name. Even the school principal, which makes me wonder if the school in question is a school of sex.
The way you described the school is morally wrong and I don't think there will be any lesson to learn at the end.
2. Your use of tense and English is not manageable to say the least. Cultivate the habit of reading from other writers and master how they make use of the English words. Tenses inclusive.
3. Use of abbreivation is totally unacceptable. I had a tough time reading a sentence where you represented 'by' with the letter 'b.' Who does that?
4. Go back to the drawing board. Read more, write short stories instead for people to correct and you take to it. You will improve with time. Continuing like this, am sorry to tell you no one will read your story. As I dey now, I am clicking the 'unfollow' button.
Remember, we are all learners and while I am able to correct you, someone somewhere is correcting my story as well. Even you can correct my mistakes. So, why not learn from me to make me learn from you? I hope you understand.
Peace!

This your tense aint good...dont undersand the whole thing i thing you should modify em